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Kom skryf saam in jou eie plekkie => Kom deel jou woordwerke => Louis se plek => Topic started by: Louis on June 11, 2012, 05:51:43 AM

Title: abandoned
Post by: Louis on June 11, 2012, 05:51:43 AM

once,
afloat
on the vast ocean
of your deepset love.

now,
just driftwood,
abandoned
on a rocky shore.

Title: Re: abandoned
Post by: Angelica on June 11, 2012, 08:29:54 AM

Oh man,  too sad.
But still beauts.

Title: Re: abandoned
Post by: Ah Willa on June 11, 2012, 11:33:20 AM

so little
so much
Louis you really now how to use words powerful!

With a few words, you relayed a love story with a sad ending ...

beautiful!

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Post by: PM on June 12, 2012, 06:25:12 PM

Baie mooi Louis, ek wens jy het 'n skets gehad wat ons daarby kon gebruik.
Ek het darem 'n pragtige foto wat ook mooi daarby sal pas.

Title: Re: abandoned
Post by: Ah Willa on June 13, 2012, 07:32:26 AM

so mooi ek moes bietjie speel